One of my recent posts introduced the concept of writing “concisely,” meaning eliminating unnecessary words.
Here are a few more examples.
1] Not concise (some people say “wordy”): this research sheds some light on
Quick fix: this research illuminates
The word “illuminates” is powerful and precise and replaces the four words “sheds some light on.”
2] Not concise: she researches various types of categories of minerals
Quick fix: she researches categories of minerals
The words “various types of” add no additional meaning to “categories” and so should be deleted.
3] Not concise: they sat in a circular formation
Quick fix: they sat in a circle
Isn’t a “circular formation” just a “circle”?
4] Not concise: the paper puts the emphasis on
Quick fix: the paper emphasizes
Same meaning, 50% fewer words.
If you have interesting examples of ways you’ve made your own writing more concise, please share them as a comment!